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Deviousness |
Close your eyes, for your eyes will only tell the truth
And the truth isn't what you want to see
In the dark, it is easy to pretend
That the truth is what it ought to be...
Both the song and your piece have great wisdom, I think.
You did a great job!
I like how you brought examples:
"The scene of a murder is found in the daylight. The lonely child stands under the streetlight. The runaway teenager leaves by moonlight. Tearful wishes are made by starlight."
because it shows that the narator actually has a point, lol.
I also think it was a good thing to end the piece with the suggestion "I think that it would be better if we were all bathed in darkness…"
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